An Appointment to Writing Center

I went to the Writing Center last week and that was the first time for me to go there. I talked with Ms. Swift before during writing classes but this time she helped me a lot on my Dairy of Ellen.

I first introduced what the book Gathering of Pearls was about then I told her something about Ellen. Ms. Swift asked me about the book’s background, especially the time. Then I realized I know almost nothing about the background. I only know it was in 20 century and about 1950. So Ms. Swift took over a book. It was a picture book introduced what American’s life was like in 1970. There were Beatles, Rolling Stones, and rock and roll. She also told me there were telephone but no mobile phone. She also asked about Ellen’s hobbies, favorite things, and her family. Ellen is the girl who also spent all of her time on social and her boyfriend. Like many other collage girl on that time, she doesn’t really care about studying. The reason why she went to collage was to find a perfect boyfriend. Compare with Sookan, she has so much more money which has shown in chapter 2. So her sense of worth can be shown in her dairy.

I realized in my dairy, I said Ellen called Kyle almost every other day, and this was impossible. For not every dorm could have a telephone for student. I changed my dairy into Ellen wrote to Kyle every other day. Then I add more details about a collage girl’s imagination, especially a girl in a relationship. Kyle and Ellen were on a long distance relationship so there might were some small arguments and misunderstand between them. Also, in American collage, there are some important vacation and festival like Halloween, Thanksgiving, and Christmas. I experienced these holidays so I decided to add some events in my life to Ellen’s diary. Ms. Swift asked a lot of questions about Ellen. She asked about Ellen’s personality, her relationship with her roommate and her parents, her daily life, and is she outgoing or not. When she asked I had no idea how to answer all those questions. So I have to add more things in my dairy not only events like prom and social party but also some details like her school life, her dorm life, and her relationship withal other people. When you start to introduce a person, the first thing you have to do is to know about this person. Her name, age, hobbies, life, where is she come form, her parents, how was her childhood, does every one likes her… I realized I was not ready to write about Ellen. I prepare to make a list about Ellen’s information and what will happen on her so that I can write her diary with evidence but not only imagination.

After I went to Writing Center, I learned that no matter you read or write something, you have to know about its background. The information will help you to understand more clearly about character’s behavior and plot.

definitions and examples

A comma splice is the use of a comma to join two independent clauses. 

It was already 10am,I finally woke up and checked my mail.

A run-on is a sentence in which two or more independent clauses (i.e., complete sentences) are joined without an appropriate punctuation or conjunction.

It was a rainy Sunday； every one died through the war.

Fragments are incomplete sentences. Usually, fragments are pieces of sentences that have become disconnected from the main clause. One of the easiest ways to correct them is to remove the period between

the fragment and the main clause. Other kinds of punctuation may be needed for the newly combined sentence.

Was a boy.

An independent clause is a sentence

She is a girl.

In linguistics, a dependent clause (or a subordinate clause) is a clausethat provides an independent clause with additional information, but which cannot stand alone as a sentence. Dependent clauses either modify the independent clause of a sentence or serve as a component of it.

,and there are full of water.

Diary of Ellen 3/4

BEFORE THE YEAR START

       This is my first year in collage. I am not so interested in how the school will be like because I really don’t care about it. The most important thing for a collage girl is not study but to find a perfect guy. Since I already found my future husband (), I do not need to pay any attention on my study. I just need to wait for his propose in the next four years. If I am lucky enough maybe I can become the first fresh man girl who got proposed.

9---1

       I am so excited that my roommate is a Korean girl named Sookan. OMG that is the first time for me to talk with a Korean girl! She is so much different than the others, she is shy, not very talkative, and so special. She was wearing a Hankook when I first saw her. That is a traditional Korean dress which really suites her skin color. I have never expected that I can be roommate with such a special girl.

---2

Today I went shopping with Sookan together, I found a pink pillow which seems really match our room but she doesn’t really like it. I asked her if she wants it she said: ”No. I do.” Which made me worried about if she likes it or not. She doesn’t have many colth in her luggage so I wanted to buy some clothes with her together but she rejected. She doesn’t show her thoughts very often.

---3

       I do not really see my roommate every day. She is just so busy. Every morning she wakes up early then me and always come back from library at mid night. I just can’t understand why can’t she enjoy her collage life. I don’t really like this school because Kyle is a little bit far away from me and we are now on a long distance relationship, what if he cheated on me?

---4

       Today is a sunny Sunday. I wrote to Kyle. I miss him so much! I am so glade to see his writings again. I haven’t write to him for 2 weeks because he was so busy about his homework. I introduced Sookan to him, he also told me his new roommate named Tom. Long distance relationship is terrible, I can’t keep my self to worry about their might be some girl who is more beautiful then me. I asked Kyle if he really loves me, I asked him does he ever cheated on me. He told me he really loves me but he thinks I don’t trust him.

10---1

       The school is terrible! Why is there so much homework! How does my roommate finish her homework every day? Why does she have so many time to study!

       Even though I don’t really care about my score but my parents do care about it. I should ask my roommate about how to manage time.

---2

       I don’t understand why does my roommate likes Marci. She is so quiet and not talkative. There must be many secrets behind her. Anyway that is not my business. I only need Kyle. We wrote to each other more frequently, almost 3 times a week. I can feel his love to me, I can’t keep imagine our wedding. It must be in a forest with white lily everywhere.

---3

       The day is so boring, everyday is same. Wake up in the morning, go to school, have lunch, do homework, go to bed. I hope vacations can come soon so that I can go to see my Kyle. What if I give him this diary as his next birthday gift? Then he will know how much I miss him everyday.

---4

       Why did I chose to come to a Girl’s school! I haven’t see a man for two whole month already. All the girls here don’t have make up and wear perfume. Lisa told me she did that was because there are no man in this school so she doesn’t have to dress up pretty. I really can not understand them. Isn’t make your self pretty is what a girl should do everyday?

11---1

       I hate the weather today. It was raining this morning. The weather has already been cold. I really miss my parents and my friends. But thanksgiving break is coming soon so I can go to see them.

       Sookan, doesn’t look well today. She might had cold. I suggested her to go to health center but she rejected. She said she haven’t finish her homework yet. Then she went to library. I am going to invite her to spend her Thanksgiving break with me.

---2

The weather was so bad today, I don’t even want to gat up this morning. Oh I really want to sleep in my warm bed with Kyle on my side in a cold weather. The snow day is coming soon I guess. I really want to see Kyle now, I never know I can miss him so much before.

---3

I went to health center today and got a flu shot today. The weather has became colder and colder, almost every one got cold. I try to avoid fever so that I won’t worry about the virus pass on through saliva. All the leaves has fallen, only the trunk is still there. I have never felt the campus is so quiet before.

---4

Even though the food in dinning hall is not very good but I still gained a lot of weight. What should I do!!! I can’t see Kyle in such a fat body! I am going to keep diet from tomorrow! I am going to eat less meat and more vegetable, also I am going to run 5 miles after school! OMG how could I became so fat!

12---1

I found keeping diet is a really hard thing. But I think I can make it. I can do anything for Kyle. He is my world! I felt more and more tired every day maybe caused by diet. My hairs are also dropping. Today before the Chemistry class I went up stairs and almost spilled down. But the good news is that I have lost 5 pound already.

---2

I am so excited this is the first snow day!!! I can finally have time to enjoy my breakfast in by bedroom. Sitting on the bed, reading books, enjoy my coffee, and look at the snow out side. The scenery makes me remember Kyle. Last year during the Christmas I really had a great fun with him. I really hope he can be right by my side now.

---3

This is the last day before Christmas Break. I have been waiting for this day for a whole month! But, the flu shot seems doesn’t really worked, I still got flu. Also Sookan had a heavy stomachache yesterday. I really want to sleep next to her but I don’t want her also have the flu. I really don’t know what to do when I saw her lying in the bed of health center. Her face was so pale.

---4

I finally arrived at home. The heavy snow made me spent 16 hours on the way back home. I took the train back, it was so cold in the train, the sofa was not soft, and window was frozen. But all that is ok for me because I am going to see my Kyle! On the way back I couldn’t stop smelling when thought him.

1---1

This is a totally new year. I did not went to Times Square as usual. I know it is very romantic to kiss with lover at the moment at there but I am so familiar with this city, I have already studied in that city for 3 months. Every where is romantic when Kyle is with me. Even though we write to each other 3 times a week but I still have so many things to tell him when we are together. He said I was like a puppy.

---2

This day still comes. I have to go back school and study. I am not going to have any vacation in the next 3 months. I am also not going to see him for a long time. This is the first day without him. I only left him for 18 hours and I already started to miss him.

---3

Life is so hard! Why is the weather so nice today! When the snow day comes again I can stay in my dorm and sleep for a whole day. I really miss the time during Christmas. I had a gift from my mom which is the best gift every. It was a totally new bedroom. I finally don’t have to sleep in that pink bedroom like a little girl any more.

---4

I miss my mom’s cooking. :(. The food in school is the worst food ever. I can’t tell why did I become so fat in the last semester. All the exams has finish and the life is so boring. I am going shopping with Lily this weekend and but a nice boots. My poor roommate kept losing weight, her face was smaller then the first time I saw her.

2---2

Time past so fast. 1/12 of the year has passed. But since time has passed so fast that means I can see Kyle soon. I only have to wait two more month and I can see his face again. He also misses me. He wrote a page of letter with full of my name on it. I can feel his love from every letter he wrote to me. I collected all of them in my shelf so I can read them whenever I miss him.

 

Dairy of Ellen

BEFORE THE YEAR START

       This is my first year in collage. I am not so interested in how the school will be like because I really don’t care about it. The most important thing for a collage girl is not study but to find a perfect guy. Since I already found my future husband (), I do not need to pay any attention on my study. I just need to wait for his propose in the next four years. If I am lucky enough maybe I can become the first fresh man girl who got proposed.

9---1

       I am so excited that my roommate is a Korean girl named Sookan. OMG that is the first time for me to talk with a Korean girl! She is so much different than the others, she is shy, not very talkative, and so special. She was wearing a Hankook when I first saw her. That is a traditional Korean dress which really suites her skin color. I have never expected that I can be roommate with such a special girl.

---2

Today I went shopping with Sookan together, I found a pink pillow which seems really match our room but she doesn’t really like it. I asked her if she wants it she said: ”No. I do.” Which made me worried about if she likes it or not. She doesn’t have many colth in her luggage so I wanted to buy some clothes with her together but she rejected. She doesn’t show her thoughts very often.

---3

       I do not really see my roommate every day. She is just so busy. Every morning she wakes up early then me and always come back from library at mid night. I just can’t understand why can’t she enjoy her collage life. I don’t really like this school because Kyle is a little bit far away from me and we are now on a long distance relationship, what if he cheated on me?

---4

       Today is a sunny Sunday. I called Kyle. I miss him so much! I am so glade to hear his voce again. I haven’t call him for 2 weeks because he was so busy about his homework. I introduced Sookan to him, he also told me his new roommate named Tom. Long distance relationship is terrible, I can’t keep my self to worry about their might be some girl who is more beautiful then me. I asked Kyle if he really loves me, I asked him does he ever cheated on me. He told me he really loves me but he thinks I don’t trust him.

10---1

       The school is terrible! Why is there so much homework! How does my roommate finish her homework every day? Why does she have so many time to study!

       Even though I don’t really care about my score but my parents do care about it. I should ask my roommate about how to manage time.

---2

       I don’t understand why does my roommate likes Marci. She is so quiet and not talkative. There must be many secrets behind her. Anyway that is not my business. I only need Kyle. We call each other more frequently, almost 3 times a week. I can feel his love to me, I can’t keep imagine our wedding. It must be in a forest with white lily everywhere.

---3

       The day is so boring, everyday is same. Wake up in the morning, go to school, have lunch, do homework, go to bed. I hope vacations can come soon so that I can go to see my Kyle. What if I give him this diary as his next birthday gift? Then he will know how much I miss him everyday.

---4

       Why did I chose to come to a Girl’s school! I haven’t see a man for two whole month already. All the girls here don’t have make up and wear perfume. Lisa told me she did that was because there are no man in this school so she doesn’t have to dress up pretty. I really can not understand them. Isn’t make your self pretty is what a girl should do everyday?

11---1

       I hate the weather today. It was raining this morning. The weather has already been cold. I really miss my parents and my friends. But thanksgiving break is coming soon so I can go to see them.

       Sookan, doesn’t look well today. She might had cold. I suggested her to go to health center but she rejected. She said she haven’t finish her homework yet. Then she went to library. I am going to invite her to spend her Thanksgiving break with me.

11/28/2015 diary

11/28/2015

This is the last whole day for me to stay in Boston. 

I went to Harvard University with my friend named Mie. We got up so late that we didn't went out until afternoon. On the way to Harvard, inside the subway station, an old man can to us and asked if we have two dollars for him to buy a ticket. Both of us didn't have any cash so he went to ask another traveler. I thought he only asked foreigners was because native people didn't want to help him. But of the way back to hostel, we met the same kind of guy again, it showed my thought was wrong. That was a young man who was wearing black jacket with hoodie. He went to ask us if we have some dollars, I gave him 5 dollars and Mie doesn't. Then he asked if we had fun in the museum. At that moment I realized the reason he doesn't for help to native people was because he was a cheater. This kind of people only ask travelers who seems to be nice. The ticket of the museum was able to stick on the shirt and I forgot to take it off after we went out of the museum. That was why that young man recognized we were not ABC but travelers. 

But still we had a lot of fun in the University. Both of us took a picture of touching the left feet of John Harvard's statue. People believes that after touching his left feet we can study in Harvard. I did the same thing 2 years before, I made a wish to study in America, and now I made it.

Many school buildings were closed so we went to Harvard Natural History Museum (HNHM). There were verious kinds of animals specimens and different kinds of metal. Because we went to there too late so we only spent 30 minutes inside and the museum were closed. If I have another chance I would go there again.